Glossary entry (derived from question below)
English term or phrase:
A contribution to the evaluation of achievements of xxxxxx to be a candidate for the Nobel Peace Prize, nominated by his governm
English answer:
Evaluating the achievements of xxxxxx who was nominated by his government as a candidate for the Nobel Peace Prize: a contributi
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Elizabeth Lyons
Mar 19, 2005 16:16
19 yrs ago
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A contribution to the evaluation of achievements of xxxxxx to be a candidate for the Nobel Peace Prize, nominated by his government
It's the subtitle of a documentary. I believe I have to interoduce some changes to make it sound right. Any suggestions?
It's the subtitle of a documentary. I believe I have to interoduce some changes to make it sound right. Any suggestions?
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| 4 +12 | Evaluating the achievements of.... |
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Elizabeth Lyons
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Works in: French to English, Italian to English, Portuguese to English, and 2 more.
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English term (edited):
A contribution to the evaluation of achievements of xxxxxx
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Evaluating the achievements of....
Evaluating the achievements of xxxxxx (who was/is) nominated by his government for candidacy to receive the Nobel Peace Prize: a contribution.
I would like to see the original language passage with the previous and following sentences, if possible, to render this into perfect English.
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Note added at 4 hrs 8 mins (2005-03-19 20:24:46 GMT)
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Here is another variation of this phrase that occurred to me looking at this afresh:
\"Evaluating the achievements of xxxxxx who was nominated by his government as a candidate for the Nobel Peace Prize: a contribution.\"
I would like to see the original language passage with the previous and following sentences, if possible, to render this into perfect English.
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Note added at 4 hrs 8 mins (2005-03-19 20:24:46 GMT)
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Here is another variation of this phrase that occurred to me looking at this afresh:
\"Evaluating the achievements of xxxxxx who was nominated by his government as a candidate for the Nobel Peace Prize: a contribution.\"
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Can Altinbay
: I like this one the best, sa it conveys everything and flows well. The original subtitle is rather too long, but we can't control that.
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Thank you! :)
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Swantje Holtken
11 mins
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Thank you! :)
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Kim Metzger
: Good solution. Long subtitles are typical of academic style.
12 mins
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Thank you!:)
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JeffFish (X)
: da fishes say: da longer, da better
19 mins
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In academia, right? :)
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Robert Donahue (X)
57 mins
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Thanks! :)
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Madeleine MacRae Klintebo
59 mins
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Thanks! :)
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Rania KH
2 hrs
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Thanks so much :)
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Refugio
3 hrs
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Thank you! :)
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Shane London
5 hrs
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Shane, thank you!
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Alp Berker
5 hrs
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Alp, thank you!
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Anna Maria Augustine (X)
7 hrs
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Anna, thank you!
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Alfa Trans (X)
13 hrs
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4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "Thanks a lot. I will use your second suggestion"
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8 mins
phrase
Nobel Peace Prize?: The achievements of XXX, (recently) nominated by his government,
Peer comment(s):
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Marian Greenfield
: nicely put
5 mins
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thanks Marian :-)
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Robert Donahue (X)
: What's so wrong with short and sweet? Brevity being the soul of wit and all....This is just fine.
9 mins
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thanks negdevezde!
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Kim Metzger
: You've left out a lot of the content.
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thanks Kim :-) my style is short and sweet
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Discussion
Regarding the length, I think I can call the client and ask to shorten it