Apr 23, 2022 09:48
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Works in: English to Spanish, Spanish to English, English to French, and 6 more.
los remordimientos la atenazaron
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I would like to know the best translation of this phrase from Latin American Spanish into American English.
Translator colleagues from Spain, feel free to send me your suggestions as well. This is a translation about Mythology. Is okay to translate it as the remorses gripped her?
It's about the story of Theseus and the Minotaur of the Greek Mythology.
I hope that all of you are healthy and safe from Covid19.
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Ariadna se fue con él, le amaba, desde el primer momento en que le vio le amaba, pero se dio cuenta de que su corazón empezaba a endurecerse con la fama. Tenía ante si el sangriento trozo de vela que cubría la cabeza de su hermano y fue testigo del incendio de la flota de su padre y los remordimientos la atenazaron cuando vio desde la popa a Creta, desvaneciéndose en el horizonte, sabiendo que nunca podría regresar.
Translator colleagues from Spain, feel free to send me your suggestions as well. This is a translation about Mythology. Is okay to translate it as the remorses gripped her?
It's about the story of Theseus and the Minotaur of the Greek Mythology.
I hope that all of you are healthy and safe from Covid19.
Here is the full paragraph for your review:
Ariadna se fue con él, le amaba, desde el primer momento en que le vio le amaba, pero se dio cuenta de que su corazón empezaba a endurecerse con la fama. Tenía ante si el sangriento trozo de vela que cubría la cabeza de su hermano y fue testigo del incendio de la flota de su padre y los remordimientos la atenazaron cuando vio desde la popa a Creta, desvaneciéndose en el horizonte, sabiendo que nunca podría regresar.
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| Stuck in despair |
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Andrew Bramhall
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Remorse ate/gnawed away at her
Ariadne went with him, she loved him, she loved him from the first moment she clapped eyes on him, but she realised that her heart was beginning to harden with fame. She held before her the bloodied piece of the sail that covered her brother's head and witnessed the burning of her father's fleet and remorse ate away at /gripped her as she watched Crete fading into the horizon from the stern, knowing she could never return.
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| Thanks Andrew. |
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Zeinab Hamid
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She was seized by remorse
meaning the feeling of remorse took over her
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Note added at 1 hr (2022-04-23 11:00:30 GMT)
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Remorse meaning guilt
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Note added at 1 hr (2022-04-23 11:08:06 GMT)
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Oops! I noticed your suggestion after submitting the answer! Sorry about that. I agree then but perosonally I would use ‘remorse’ rather than ‘remorses’
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Note added at 1 hr (2022-04-23 11:09:52 GMT)
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https://www.wordhippo.com/what-is/the-plural-of/remorse.html
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Note added at 1 hr (2022-04-23 11:00:30 GMT)
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Remorse meaning guilt
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Note added at 1 hr (2022-04-23 11:08:06 GMT)
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Oops! I noticed your suggestion after submitting the answer! Sorry about that. I agree then but perosonally I would use ‘remorse’ rather than ‘remorses’
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Note added at 1 hr (2022-04-23 11:09:52 GMT)
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https://www.wordhippo.com/what-is/the-plural-of/remorse.html
Note from asker:
| THANKS FOR YOUR HELP ZEINAB. I WROTE SOMETHING SIMILAR. |
| It's fine dear. Thanks for your suggestion. |
4 hrs
regret haunted her
An option
Note from asker:
| Thanks Bartholomew. |
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Marcelo González
United States
United States
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Native in: English (Variant: US)
Works in: Spanish to English, English to Spanish
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44
[feelings of] remorse took hold of her
atenazar
Sujetar algo fuertemente haciendo presión, especialmente con unas tenazas.
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Marcia Willett · 2011 · Fiction
Remorse **took hold of her** again. 'Oh, darling, I am so sorry.' Her voice was ragged with weariness and worry. 'I'll do everything I can to help.
Short Sermons: For Family Reading, and for other like ...https://books.google.com.vn › books
Francis Bourdillon · 2022 · Fiction
A bitter **remorse took hold of him** . An insupportable load pressed upon his mind . Yet this did not lead him to God , but rather drove him to destruction .
Sentimental Tommy: The Story of His Boyhoodhttps://books.google.com.vn › books
J. M. Barrie · 2014 · Fiction
... I'se praying for Tommy," and remorse took hold of him and shook him on his seat. He broke into one hysterical laugh and then immediately began to sob.
Another option, Yugoslavia, might be 'gripped' (as you've suggested) but perhaps with the passive voice instead:
"...and she was gripped by [feelings of] remorse when she saw ..."
Sujetar algo fuertemente haciendo presión, especialmente con unas tenazas.
Forgotten Laughter: An unforgettable novel of love, loss and ...https://books.google.com.vn › books
Marcia Willett · 2011 · Fiction
Remorse **took hold of her** again. 'Oh, darling, I am so sorry.' Her voice was ragged with weariness and worry. 'I'll do everything I can to help.
Short Sermons: For Family Reading, and for other like ...https://books.google.com.vn › books
Francis Bourdillon · 2022 · Fiction
A bitter **remorse took hold of him** . An insupportable load pressed upon his mind . Yet this did not lead him to God , but rather drove him to destruction .
Sentimental Tommy: The Story of His Boyhoodhttps://books.google.com.vn › books
J. M. Barrie · 2014 · Fiction
... I'se praying for Tommy," and remorse took hold of him and shook him on his seat. He broke into one hysterical laugh and then immediately began to sob.
Another option, Yugoslavia, might be 'gripped' (as you've suggested) but perhaps with the passive voice instead:
"...and she was gripped by [feelings of] remorse when she saw ..."
Note from asker:
| Thanks for your help Marcelo. |
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Daniel Rodriguez
Brazil
Brazil
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Works in: Portuguese to Spanish, English to Spanish, Spanish to Portuguese, and 3 more.
remorse gripped her
:)
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| Thanks Daniel. I suggested the same like you. |
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Stuck in despair
Stuck in despair and loneliness - https://www.reddit.com/r/Vent/comments/pp5vdu/stuck_in_despa...
Stuck in despair and loneliness - Stuck in despair and loneliness : Vent (reddit.com)
Stuck in despair and loneliness - Stuck in despair and loneliness : Vent (reddit.com)
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| Thanks a lot. |
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